this is my work in progress writing for the big coke bomb that we did on monday 14th of october could I get some feedback on how I could describe the explosion. all of my class had to do this for writing we were doing recounts.
It was a sunny bright monday and we had just finished a game of ballrush. Miss Mccormick blew her whistle and Miss Thomason was ready for her experiment. Rican had ran from class and made it in time for the big coke explosion.
I really enjoyed this because I got to try this again but at a different time.
