Hi brad I like how you put screeching noises of a blade on a wall. you might need to add some ownership to the blade, and instead of a wall, you could say"the wall." this reminds me of Raven from Fortnite. bye!
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Hello Brad it is Jesse and good job on you work but next time can you put some more full stops in it good job bye
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ReplyDeleteI like how you put screeching noises of a blade on a wall. you might need to add some ownership to the blade, and instead of a wall, you could say"the wall." this reminds me of Raven from Fortnite.
bye!